Coincidentally, this evening I was looking at similarly-structured tautologies in 2 parallel sentences in my poems -- one written in India in 20008, the other written today. The earlier line was: "while what remains the same remains the same." The newer line: "the one who writes the poem writes the poem." Seeing your poem tonight gave me a sense of shared interest / kindred syntax.
You just purged it beautifully !
I keep reading this, over and over. The rhythm and the mouthfeel is divine. ♡
re: "what slips from me is what slips from me"
Coincidentally, this evening I was looking at similarly-structured tautologies in 2 parallel sentences in my poems -- one written in India in 20008, the other written today. The earlier line was: "while what remains the same remains the same." The newer line: "the one who writes the poem writes the poem." Seeing your poem tonight gave me a sense of shared interest / kindred syntax.